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Target Writing (The lighthouse Keeper)

The lighthouse Keeper

This week for Target writing was just like last weeks writing but we had to rewrite the video we watched and we had to have more than 9 sentences but I think I bet that by a lot. 

Here is my work

What would your one look like?

Target Writing (Lighthouse Keeper)

 Target Writing

This week for target writing (Witch is my writing for this week) we had to watch a video about a lighthouse keeper and write more than 9 sentences about his background for example when he was a kid.

here is my work!

How will you write this?

Target Writing (dragon)

 Dragon

This week for target writing (witch is my writing for this week) we had to wring nine sentences about a pitcher of a small dragon and at least two of the sentences had to be complex sentences. I did four complex sentences because I thought two was not going to be enough.

Here is my work

What will your nine sentences be like?

My Speech Comment

 My Speech Comment

From last week and this week we have been making Speeches for our hub and we got budded up with some one and we had to write a comment on their speech. We had to make a blog showing what the other person commented on our speech. (I was budded up with Daniel)  

Here is the comment

I highlighted the changes

What will your comment be like?

Complex Sentences

 Complex Sentences

Like last week we where looking at the differences for a simple sentence, compound sentence and a complex sentence. A complex sentence has a independent clause and a dependent clause, that technically means that one part of the sentence can stand on its own and the other part of the sentence can not stand on its own. So what we had to do was to fix some sentences on a doc and copy and past the sentences onto the doc.  

here are the sentences:

The boy, who was only seven, could play the piano.

The beach, which was very crowded, was hotter than ever.

The ball, which was kicked by the goalkeeper, flew through the air.

The music, which was too loud, gave me a headache.

The old lady, who had lots of bags, waited for a taxi.

The bus, which was empty, sped down the street.

The music, which was too loud, gave me a headache.

The old lady, who had lots of bags, waited for a taxi.

The bus, which was empty, sped down the street.

The loaf of bread, which she bought last week, was moldy.

The singer, who was on the stage, sang to the audience.

The child, who was lost, was crying in the supermarket.

The aeroplane, which was full of passengers, was landing at the airport.

The people, who were pushing and shoving, queued to buy a bargain.

The music, which was too loud, gave me a headache.

The astronaut climbed into the space rocket.

The ants, which were two years old, built their colony.

The elderly man, who was 91 at the time, struggled across the road.

The rainbow, which was 100m long, stretched across a cloudless sky. 

how will you fill out the sentences?

Making compound sentences

 Making compound sentences

This week for target writing we made compound sentences. Compound sentences are like combining to simple sentences together, for example: The dog ran, although the cat walk. The one I did was: Even though the cat doesn't like us, it will still miss us. The thing that combines the two sentences together can also be at the start and in the middle but not the end.

here is a pitcher of my compound sentences.

What will your compound sentences be like?

Show not tell

 This week for writing we were learning what show not tell is. so it mean to show something and not tell it, and we had to write one about our Tūrangawaewae. that means a place to stand.

and this is my one hope you like it.

Cool clear cold water, crunchy crispy chippy fish and chips.   

The air is as fresh as a ready barked cookie.    

And Margaret many is a storm of joy.

This is the best place because it is so much fun.

This Is the best place because it is teaming with nature.

This is the best place because you can see the Maori culture everywhere.

you can do so many fun things here,

Like going on a Waka,

Or go to the museum and see some of our culture.

Can you guess were mine is?

Sentence Expansion

 Sentence Expansion

We are leaning to use a strategy that helps us expand sentences.

1, They had an argument

When: Two weeks ago.

Where: In the car.

Why: About a song.

Two weeks ago in the car they had an argument about a song.

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2, Oscar Cried

When: At night.

Where: At his house.

Why: When he had to go to bed.

At night Oscar cried at his house because he had to go to bed.

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is this a tectonic that you have used before?

My Amazing Week 6 writing Chunk 8

Soar

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By Tomasz

Chunk 8

( Colon )

( Alliteration )

( Complex Sentences )

Up, up and away, Lukas was back on track flying in the sky.

Lukas glanced, gleared and gassed over at Mara. 

Lukas goes above the clowds and as he look’s around he sees all of his friends and family.

Lukas Races over to the front of his Ship.

Then opens up the : Little Tiny Miniature Bag.

Inside the bag was the Most Shiniest Sparkliest and Smalist Star In the World.

Lukas take it out of the Bag and Pushed it in the Sky.

As Lukas Pushis the Star in the sky it dress of in its shining Glory.

Welcome Nau mai, haere mai ki tēnei taonga

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